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Direct, concise, interesting.
I heard this story before and it’s too predictable.
Identity, Thin Blue Line, Black Angel, Beyond the Call, Red Corner and what about True Crime….
There are no criminologists back in the 19th century, perhaps she is a police officer, no probably not, is she an attorney, probably not in those days… what is her role in this??
This story has been told before. You have just changed the setting…and maybe you have the addition of a corrupt judge and a woman protagonist.
Maybe I am missing something here, but how is this so original!
I think you wrote a fair log line and that is all.
J
Sounds interesting
Technically a good logline, however not to the point that it stands out as original. It doesn’t make me want to read the story.
I like it a lot. Very interesting storyline and it’s definitely a great period of time for the story to take place. Would love to read it.
Interesting. The setting and protagonist seem like they have potential.
Not bad. A good hook, a period piece, a female criminologist. I like this.
The logline is constructed well, but perhaps a little off the mark. Why is the female criminologist ridiculed? Because she is a woman? If so, then that should be your hook. She must not only overcome this corrupt judge, but a male dominated legal system as well. Sort of the way Clarice did in “Silence of the Lambs.”
I always enjoy my women in power and while the log line is written perfectly, the story screams a darker retelling of a story with a Sherlock Holmes twist.
Solid. This could be a good one.
It’s missing something, but otherwise very good
Really nice. I think is one story never told before.
Sounds good, there’s a story , what about a hook? a woman working as a criminologist in the 19 century?, she seems to me that there´s something there, beyond her as individual..does it relates to genre discrimination in that century? , maybe I must read more about that years… is it about a woman fighting for his own rights as she saves a wrongly convicted man?
“Why do I want to read a script or watch a movie about someone that struggles through the story?”
Really? I think perhaps you misunderstand what they mean by struggle. Every good story involves a struggle for the protagonist to overcome. They struggle because there are many pitfalls and difficulties in their path but that doesn’t mean they don’t win out in the end.
If the logline didn’t explain why she was struggling, I’d understand; but it does and very clearly so. For that reason, I think this is a pretty good logline. It’s got the necessary information for a logline and it tells you what the central conflict is. These are the things a logline needs to tell us and pull us in with it. Based on the logline, the story seems to have a potentially good dramatic story and character drama.
The logline is great, very well written. Not so sure the story is for me… It’s just been done way too many times, although rarely in this time period.
Love it.
perfect logline
I really like this but it’s lacking urgency
It's a facinating character set in a wonderful time and great use of irony. But then you go and spoil it with the word struggles. Why do I want to read a script or watch a movie about someone that struggles through the story?
I like the female lead in a man’s 19th Century world.
One thing about logline is this more Suspicion with Cher or Holmes with Downey?
Not sure about the concept but I think it is one of the best written loglines in here.
Good!
I agree that this is a logline with little room for improvement. And, yes there is a hook: female criminologist in the 19th. century. Am reminded of two Caleb Carr novels about criminology in the 19th century: “The Alienist” and “The Angel of Darkness”; and both had female characters ridiculed for “not knowing their place”.
strong logline.
Strong log line. Sounds like we’ve seen this before. Is there anything you can add that slices this up a bit and gives it an “original” feel?
clear and concise. Very well done.
This is nice.
A good example of a correct logline. Take me back Sebastian.
I’d say pretty stong logline. Sonds interesting. I’d like to read this.
Don’t know when criminologists were in london, but I really like this logline. This can work in any timeline.
i think you could have something here…
Its confusing to understand, perhaps you should consider revision. The 19th century is a total of 100 years, which will include the Georgian Era (King George) and Victorian Era (Queen Victoria) The story can be mistakenly interpreted under these two common timelines of the 19th Century. The fact of a criminologist did not exist in London until 10 years before the Jack the Ripper murders when the CID (Criminal Investigation Department) was established in April 7, 1878. Hope you understand that improper dating can hurt the over all vision of your logline. Also “ridiculed” appears in excess… I also have difficulties understanding your closing statement, “by a corrupt judge intent on remaining in power.” it doesn’t introduce the incident well as a complete timeline. i suggest along the phrase, “when a corrupt judge intends to remain in power.” or emphasize on your character’s false claim or accusations that leads into identifying this corrupt judge within your logline.
I agree with paulmailhot, but, if there isn’t that extra little “hook,” (although, I am sure there is, even if it is a minor plot point,) run with what you’ve got. This is a really good logline. No doubt about it. I don’t like this genre, and I am not a fan of “period pieces,” but I am interested in the story. If the script is as well constructed as the logline, you will do well. Good job!
Solid logine.
I think the construction of the logline is solid.
I think the story is timeless and translates well in any era. However, that might be the weakness. I can see this exact 21st century version any time I want on countless shows. It’s not an original idea. The 19th century angle is good as you wonder what kind of obstacles a woman would have to do the job. YET i don’t feel it’s enough for me to take a chance on a read. Is there something else that’s intriguing about the characters or plot that could draw a reader in? Hook the producer with something that demands his/her attention. You probably have it and don’t realize it. Figure out how to work that special thing into the logline and you are ready to roll.