Diner 20/20
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Diner 20/20

In 2020, a quiet man with thick glasses takes his meals at diner counters for 3 weeks as he drives American byways from Los Angeles to Washington, DC, where he’s being vetted for a job of national importance.

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    1. Orti says
      June 7, 2016, 3:19 am
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      Sorry, No story!

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      DiversityU says
      February 23, 2015, 4:51 pm
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      We can’t get a sense of a story that would be of interest to most.

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      says
      January 13, 2015, 9:06 am
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      Sorry, this sounds pretty boring. Nothing that caught my attention.

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      November 15, 2014, 3:27 pm
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      While nothing is clear. But suppose that the main hook in his specific job? Maybe he is killer?

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      KuramoBay says
      November 8, 2014, 7:09 pm
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      Agree with the other comments.

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      Keysieboy says
      November 6, 2014, 5:28 am
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      Sounds a wee bit vague could do with re-working.

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      1rainman1 says
      November 5, 2014, 10:56 am

      Sorry, but this log line doesn’t appeal to me, and as written it won’t attract producers either.

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    8. SW63 says
      October 17, 2014, 8:26 pm
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      I’m sorry (and please don’t be too offended) but I think you’ve actually come up with the most boring logline I’ve ever read.

      A quiet man with thick glasses does not sound like any sort of hero.

      Takes his meals at a diner counter for three weeks – I don’t want to watch that in a thriller because it’s not thrilling.

      This job of national importance? If he was so important, wouldn’t they fly him to his interview?

      This logline lacks:
      A) a hero with a character flaw people can identify with
      B) a goal which is significant
      C) a baddie who is more powerful than the hero and hell bent on stopping him
      D) something really big at stake for everyone.

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    9. BlueParrot says
      October 4, 2014, 7:43 am
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      I’m struggling to understand what the real action and drama are going to be in this movie/ novel.

      So far all I know is that he will be eating at diners… but why specifically do you need to mention this in the logline?

      Somehow he is being vetted for an important job… ok, but how? What does this have to do with eating at diners?

      What is his goal? What is his obstacle? What is at stake? What are the consequences of him not reaching his goal?

      Too vague right now I’m afraid.

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