Catching Jo
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Catching Jo

Jo Johnson is a rising tennis star who is injured at the U.S. Open. Her big brother Jake, a star pitcher for the Colorado Rockies, convinces her to attend Fantasy Camp with him to help with her recovery. As a child Jo’s Father taught her the knuckle-ball, a pitch she mastered, to compete against Jake in backyard match-ups. At camp no one, including Rockies players, can hit her amazing knuckle-ball. Later, with the Rockies in first place and Jo back on the circuit, Jake breaks his pitching hand on the jaw of Jo’s cheating fiance. Without Jake, the Rockies begin losing. And Jo is asked to choose between the U.S.Open and using her pitch to help Jake’s team to the World Series.

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  1. August 14, 2013, 5:35 pm
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    Some really good aspects to this script – the dialogue is terrific and it has a very simple premise to the story that I’m sure will appeal to fans of baseball movies. However, unfortunately, for me it lacked any strong reason to keep turning the pages. It was pretty predictable that Jo would end up being the hero on the field and the various romance sub-plots I felt didn’t add much to the story. I think you could make much more of the potential jealousy and conflict between Jo & her brother because she succeeded where he had failed.

    There’s also a few formatting problems – e.g. lots of additional spaces between sentences, couple of typos (e.g. p61), missing scene heading on p96. I also think some of the descriptions are too long and, if you cut these down, it’ll be clear that there isn’t much substance to the movie apart from lots of baseball game footage. I think it needs something more. But I think the writer could be very successful with a more engaging story because the quality of the writing itself is very good.

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  2. aweiss says
    August 11, 2013, 2:28 am
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    The character need a bit more personality, they all sound the same. A little more conflict is needed too. And when a new location is announced, describe the location on a separate line, then set the characters in the scene, also don’t use the word look, as it tell the audience what to look at, a no-no.

    But other than these issues, it’s all here. Terrific writing, good, different plot, a feminist baseball film in the vein of “A League of Their Own.” And without giving too much away, let them beat any other team in the NL except the Mets, that’s my team, and that goes for the Phillies too ha ha. Seriously, I’m impressed with your knowledge of baseball.I think you have something here, good luck with it.

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    bradyrick says
    August 5, 2013, 7:35 pm
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    I love baseball movies. Even some that might be far fetched. This one, not so much. But it does have a lot of potential. There are some formatting issues, etc. and that can always be worked on. This needs a bit more work.

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