Attraction
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Attraction

A revengeful pyromaniac besieges a town for the execution of his murderous pyromaniacal father in the city’s gas chambers.

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    1. September 21, 2017, 2:04 pm
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      Awesome. I would love to watch this movie!

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      April 22, 2016, 4:56 pm
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      I did not like the double use of the word pyromaniac, not only is it a mouthful it brings less power to the word second time around. Good that it was short and sweet, but maybe there could be some more mystery involved in the phrase about his father, maybe leave out the fact he also is a pyromaniac, leaving the audience and the protagonist thirsting for revenge as they have yet to discover why he was executed. Because like someone above stated, if someone is executed USUALLY it is for good reason, lest it be some sort of conspiracy, which then that might be an additional twist. Story has good potential.

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    3. Chidi says
      June 5, 2015, 8:48 pm
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      This could be great. But it doesn’t read like a logline. It reads more like a final statement of a query letter or a one pager. Telling us more about the father and the revenge would get this to where it should be.

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    4. Gunns says
      April 7, 2015, 6:22 pm
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      Revenge for an execution that has been settled by the supreme court – who’s fault is that and who is to revenge?? Doubt it… sorry

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      • Novelist56 says
        April 8, 2015, 11:09 am

        Thanks for your opinion but he wants revenge for all who captured his father. Enough said.

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      April 4, 2015, 11:02 pm
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      I don’t know, the logline do need a little more help but the story maybe interesting, good luck!

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      razelle says
      April 4, 2015, 4:26 pm
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      this is different, could be a great read

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