American Cradle
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American Cradle

A boy growing up in a slow-dying coal town becomes increasingly obsessed with restoring it to its Eden-like era when his immigrant great-grandfather and a few men forged a splendid collaboration

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      Tarekk1 says
      September 20, 2017, 4:50 pm
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      Its good

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    2. Dartistman says
      January 22, 2016, 10:08 pm
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      I don’t see this working at all. I agree with above critics, a young boy of what age and intelligence level could he be to be able to rebuild a city.

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      Lorna says
      August 21, 2015, 5:23 pm
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      I like the idea, it just needs a little more defining.

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      May 10, 2015, 8:36 pm
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      Your story needs some more development, but I think in can turn into something great. Just do some re-writes

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      April 29, 2015, 4:20 am
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      Where’s the (.) ?

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    6. Novelist56 says
      April 9, 2015, 1:46 pm
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      How is his town Eden? Do you mean before coal was found on the land? Then again, what is the importance of the coal’s production to the town?

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    7. toojazzy says
      February 13, 2015, 2:06 pm
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      What is the conflict, the hook? What is at stake? He’s a boy..how old? Can a young boy do anything about a dying town? Maybe he grew up and returns after college or time in the military and tries to re-boot the town?

      Need more info to give it a good punch.

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