Terrible Turk
In 1890′s, the time of ending eastern empires and conquering western civilization, New York was a strange culture and s...
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I like the brevity, but it’s lacking punch.
log line needs a bit more, but admittedly intriguing. if its the hiirkazu kereada afterflife that your referencing. i’m in!
It has a ton of potential but I think the logline needed a little more.
Could be a great serial TV !
Like it. Well done!
Now here’s a succinct logline that tells enough to intrigue the reader. This is what I a call “come on” logline. Well done James.
Lost here! Do yov win candy or a new car if you watch it? What generally happens if you watch it or what the heck does the station do? Clarify, rewrite, fix and just say what is generally happening and where it might lead! thanks.
I think I have the same problem. Not sure if a short tight hook is better than a longer actual story explanation.
You have provided a tag line rather than a log line. What you have is something cool to put on a movie theater poster, but really you need give a bottled version of your story for a producer to know if it’s the type of story they want to engage with.
Main character is faced with a problem with dire consequences and he must do something, or else.
Definitely not a logline. I have no idea what the story is. Potential, but only possible potential since I have barely anything to go on.
This is nice. Really inventive, right now it’s more of a tease. You can afford to flesh it out a little – giving a taste of the narrative.