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Ackerman & Associates Meet Dracula
A pair of LA real estate agents unknowingly sell a house in the Hollywood Hills to Count Dracula. Dracula has come to LA at the invitation of a sleazy film producer seeking investors to back his shlocky horror movies. But Dracula has his own motives. He is in love with the Golden Age of Hollywood and has a supernatural plan to restore it to its former glory.
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Sounds funny, though it wasn’t listed as a comedy.
I would try to shorten — maybe-
A pair of Hollywood real estate agents unknowingly sell a house to Count Dracula, who arrives with a plan to restore the movie industry to the Golden Age.
I would change the log line to first mention the sleazy film producer intent. The intent would cover having a house sold to Count Dracula and backing his horror movie. End by transitioning in a haunting way Count Dracula’s plan.
I feel like the whole “Count Dracula” has all been done before, although, this idea might do well as a dark comedy similar to “Dark Shadows.”
Have to ding this for being a synopsis, not a logline. It does sound like a comedy, though, and a fun one at that–a nod to the “Abbott and Costello Meet…” movies.
Is Dracula planning on resurrecting dead celebrities? Cemetery jokes in there, “He wants to bring back the old Hollywood…Forever.”
Possibilities, yes, but logline needs to be a quick bite or it will leave us feeling drained.
Are they clueless real estate agents, or the kind who will do whatever it takes to please a client? Could be all the difference between protagonists and minions…
I concurre with most people. The logline is too long. I would start the logline this way: When Dracula comes to LA to restore Hollywood to its former glory, …
It’s not clear who’s story is being told but I presume it is Dracula (?). The length of the logline makes it very vague. It sounds like a synopsis.
Nevertheless an interesting idea.
All you need is, “A pair of LA real estate agents unknowingly sell a house in the Hollywood Hills to Count Dracula.” Funny and concise. You’ve been bitten by the “I need to ensure that everyone understands all the things that happen in my script” bug. Trust your story, it’s strong. WP
Just trim it down a bit and you’ll be good.
It’s a fun idea but the logline is too long and it doesn’t tell us that much about the protagonist.
You have a good hook but logline is way too long… Read more like an explanation than a logline that’s supposed to tease. Action adventure? Would have thought comedey, more like a spoof would suit this but…Well, you know your story better?
Like the concept but logline too long. Needs work. Make it short and too the point.
I absolutely loved the opening of your logline. Then I felt you got muddled with the character intent. It sounds more like a comedy that becomes a drama. One way of the other – work it out in the logline.
Sounds like a fun film if it were a comedy, but being action/adventure makes it a little too much for me. I can see it, but as a comedy according to what the logline says would be more appropriate I think.
Dracula is in love with the Golden Age of Hollywood and has a supernatural plan to restore it to its former glory.
Umm, I believe this kinda says all you need to say.
Why did you mention the real estate agents then switch to the producer then drop them both and focus only on Dracula? Whose driving this story? This logline needs a lot of cleaning/tightening up.
Very asute comment. While the set ups all sound fantastic – perhaps logline should focus on the single best one? There are too many players currently – and the notion of the real estate agents selling the place to Dracula – is itself – almost enough to sell this!
Dear god I want this comedy.
Definete potential. Could be some conflict between the way dracula is portrayed on film and his actuality. What role do the estate agents play apart from selling him the house?
Yes, definitely interesting! Sounds like it could be fun.
This seems like a comedy premise, although it’s not listed in the genre.
I’m not sure what Dracula’s supernatural plan would be. Even if he made a movie like the classic Universal movies, he could possibly get The Artist type success, but it wouldn’t bring those movies back for good.