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A Tale Untold

When a writer enters the fantasy world he writes about, he becomes the center in a battle against a ruthless Half-Man Half-Ogre determined to conquer the kingdom.

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    terratoo says
    February 17, 2016, 12:19 pm
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    I find this quite interesting. I would suggest using less parentheticals.. As an example, instead of saying.
    Norman
    (looking confused)
    What do you mean?
    Make it an action phrase. Example:

    Looking confused, Norman asks,
    NORMAN
    What do you mean.

    For ease of reading, use a maximum of three to four action and dialogue lines. Doing this with action is easy. Dialogue is not. With dialogue running more than four lines, enter an action. Example:
    JOHN
    I wish it could have been different. I wish I could have – –
    I wish I could have loved you like you deserve to be
    loved. I really did try, you know.
    He looks deep into her eyes.
    JOHN (CONTINUED)
    I put everything I had into this relationship, but I
    guess some things are just not meant to be, no
    matter how hard you try.
    he frowns as tears begin to roll down her cheeks.
    JOHN (CONTINUED)
    Please know that my thoughts will always be with you,
    and I hope the day will come when you find a
    man who really loves you.

    Hope you great success into getting your story into production. Joe Koger

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