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When a single father loses his son to a kidnapping/murder, he starts an obsessive race with a terminally ill detective on his last case to find the killer. But when the detective catches the killer first, he decides that justice and the law aren’t quite the same as they used to be, so he must choose one over the other, giving the father 3 minutes of justice.

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    rvgoya says
    April 28, 2016, 4:49 am
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    three minutes…might not be worth the price of admission

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    Yekaterina says
    October 24, 2014, 8:19 am
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    Sounds interesting, but too many words.

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  3. toojazzy says
    September 19, 2014, 2:31 pm

    Terminally ill detective, nice twist. Choice between justice and revenge…..excellent. Tighten it up, eliminate extra words…

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    richay101 says
    July 22, 2013, 4:02 pm
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    sounds interesting

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    June 29, 2013, 11:08 pm
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    This story has a lot of potential. Good situation and a bit of a spin by having a terminally ill detective.

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    Rsutton says
    April 6, 2013, 3:08 pm
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    Sounds really interesting, I would love to see the film or read the screenplay. But looks like a lot of potential. good luck.

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  7. says
    March 13, 2013, 7:52 pm
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    Good story…see potential

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  8. hingylingy says
    March 10, 2013, 12:00 am
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    The story line is unique. You must condense it so it reads in two sentences.

    something like this:

    A man’s son is murdered, which leads him on a quest to find his killer. The detective on the case catches the killer first and decides to leave the killer’s fate to the father, who must choose between justice and redemption.

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    March 5, 2013, 9:42 pm
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    I like the premise. I think it could effective with just the first sentence.

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  10. October 8, 2012, 3:09 pm
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    A bit too much info, but sounds awesome!

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    September 5, 2012, 5:55 am
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    If we were allowed to vote on titles I’d give you maximum. The title is fantastic! Unfortunately this revenge style story is old and overdone. Who exactly is the main character? The father or the detective? Trim this down and put a little focus into it and don’t include the title in the logline.

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  12. wardparry says
    August 21, 2012, 2:04 pm
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    You’re way overcooking this. Just stick to the main conflict. We don’t need to know everything that happens in your script. Just wet the appetite.

    Take a leaf from the film you reference. Logline for The Brave One is – “A woman struggles to recover from a brutal attack by setting out on a mission for revenge.”

    WP

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  13. July 18, 2012, 11:24 am
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    Trim it down, don’t give the whole store away while you’re starving. Massive potential here friend.

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  14. says
    July 6, 2012, 10:45 pm
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    The biggest thing going for you is the hook as told by your title. 3 minutes of “true” justice is a powerful idea. However, it’s probably the conclusion of the story. So that leaves the rest of the story to really sell in the logline. You just have to find a way to do it more succinctly.

    When his son is murdered, a single father races to catch the killer and to exact three minutes of his own “true” justice, deciding the law is woefully inadequate.

    Maybe, maybe not. But it’s the basic idea with the hook included, all in a compact sentence. Fiddle with it to find the right mix.

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  15. sparky178 says
    June 21, 2012, 10:08 pm
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    A single father’s son is kidnapped and murdered. He races to find the killer alongside a terminally ill detective who is caught up in the street justice conundrum, weighing giving the victim’s father 3 minutes alone should he locate the murderer first, before he succumbs.

    Possibilities

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    tserlin says
    June 21, 2012, 7:33 pm
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    This premise clearly has potential. Trim the fat off your logline – and cut it to is essential elements — which is to get the reader wanting to read. Right now, you bog us down with too much.

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      tserlin says
      June 29, 2012, 8:13 pm

      If the notion of the three mintues is your hook – then perhaps starting with it might be more potent — and dump all the uneeded excess from the rest. This could be a single – fast sentence logline.

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    bradyrick says
    June 12, 2012, 6:01 am
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    When I write a logline I go back to the old quote “Always leave ’em wanting more!” Can’t give away the store in a few sentences. Make us want to read the screeplay!

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  18. rickemg says
    June 8, 2012, 1:59 pm
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    I like the hook and the story potential is very good. Make the logline a little more succinct, this is more like a synopsis than a logline.

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    garyg says
    June 8, 2012, 7:05 am
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    I think you’ve given too much info in the logline here. I appreciate the explanation of the title, but it’s not really necessary given that this probably happens in the last 3 minutes of the film. There’s no need to try to tell the whole story in an overlong logline.

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