Kyle Carmean's Profile

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  • Member Since: January 16, 2013

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Posted on November 28, 2014

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Comment on Sellers' Market I think you misunderstand. She is TIRED of the federal regulations so she takes matters into her own hands by…
Comment on Five days to live First, half the people who commented are focusing on the wrong things. The reasons why he is in the car…
Comment on The Marathon The logline is too long. An overweight gym teacher tries to win a marathon so he can…
Comment on Everything is real Ok, you need a hero in the logline. Please don't start a logline with "what if" You can do…
Comment on The Night It Happened Too many words. We don't need to know what the night was like. It sounds like to opening of a…
Comment on RiverHorse I see a good story here but the logline tells way too much. Keep it general. Lose the grieving father…
Comment on Time Skippers You had me at "fossilized alien"
Comment on My favorite mother-in-law Logline needs some work. So she is marrying her boss? A cleaner logline would…
Comment on Drive Thru This script took a while to get started but it read so smoothly. This is the best script I have…
Comment on History Is Myth This was the most trippy thing I have ever read. I didn't know what was happening most of the time.…